100 Word Challenge Week #11

It was a freezing night, my friend dared us both to go the to the haunted forest. When we got there, there was a massive sign saying 'warning', Randy hopped over the fence with me, we started shouting. After awhile we heard groaning. We sauntered to the eerie sound. We noticed a mysterious person in a robe it, the person heard us. We weren't afraid, then its brown eyes turned crimson. We darted out the woods I don't know why but we hesitated. Then the person in the robe appeared right in are faces and said ''Stay out, I will be back''. Then it vanished into grime

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  1. HillcrestBlog325 November 2017 at 13:39

    Hello Aen,
    You have used some interesting vocabulary e.g. 'massive', 'sauntered', and 'crimson', which helps paint a picture in your reader's mind. You have several run-on sentences, spelling, and grammar errors, which makes your writing difficult to follow. Please word process your stories in a 'Word' document first, then copy and paste them into your blog. 'Word' will help you realize where you have made many of your mistakes. Keep on writing and improving.
    Sincerely,
    Mrs. Van

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